Demographic: 6th grade boy, Northern CA.
This feedback is for Installment #3.
My favorite character has changed from Paul7 to Elof2. My favorite chapter is chapter 14, Paradise Lost because the whole 3rd part has been building up to it and in that chapter all "explodes."
[That was a very intense chapter. I'm glad you liked it and it didn't scare you. I was worried when I originally wrote it that it was too scary.]